Published April 3, 2009
If I ever owned the world,
it be just nonsense.
If I could be anyone else,
I'd be just myself.
Slightly quirky,
with a good chance of conversations that people never say.
Give them elegant names,
with personalities that don't ever die.
If I could ever tell you how much I loved you,
I would be lying.
Because you could never love me,
I'm just complete nonsense.
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First of all, thanks for welcoming me and the good criticism.
Second, the poem is suppose to be complete nonsense, so that's why it doesn't really make sense.
I was bored in CP Biology, and I was feeling random.
But really, I appriciate all three of you commenting and for the critique!
^__^ Thanks alot.
First of all, welcome to YWS. Now, onto the review.
This is totally misunderstanding, what does it really means?
I didn't find these bold and italics helpful. If you have something to say, say it with words. They didn't done much of a help cause they aren't really related to each other
You need to be more precise about what you feel. This poem made me think, but in a bad way-it made me think about what kind of strange love is it and is that even love.
Noncence freakling ruules. aWesomme. $$$$ WEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
Keep it up or the ruler of the universe will be displeaced. we dont want Thaaaaaaat, do wee? Good. now keep beeen cannfusing caas I cant hold it any more. Uh all those errors are aggravating me. That can be your thing OK?
Hello there!
You did a nice job with this. I think the bold and italics really add to what you are trying to convey. I like how the beginning and end come connected to one another through 'nonsense'. It took me a few times through to figure out what was going on, and I'm still not quite sure on some parts, but I think that was your point. This was definitely unique. Nice job!
Your Writing pal,
Alyssa